Eight year old Alissa has been battling a rare syndrome that
affects her kidneys, internal organs and her legs. Her parents never thought a family trip to the
local fair would result in their daughter in tears after being told she wouldn’t
be allowed to ride the rides because of her disability. The family had been to
this fair before and their daughter rode all the rides with no problems. So you can imagine how surprised the family
was when the fair worker denied their daughter the right to ride the rides and
even directly asked the family in front of a crowd what was wrong with their
daughter. Both the mother and daughter were very upset and left the fairgrounds
in tears.
I found this article through the local news station. While
this wasn’t the original story they received the story from another reliable
news source. While we all know some news sources can get some information
incorrect they are pretty reliable and would be credible and trustworthy (ethos). This story definitely has pathos because it
is about a little girl who was denied her right to enjoy herself at the local
fair. This would pull on the heart strings of most anyone I know! The news
station did an interview with the girl’s family and also tried to contact the
fairgrounds without any luck. This would be the logos part of this article.
Natasha, the first paragraph very nicely puts the reader into the story of the article. The second paragraph reads as though you wrote it for yourself, meaning that someone who is not familiar with the article may not know what you're talking about at times. Keep in mind that you need to write for a reader who may not be familiar with your topic.
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